Getting feedback is a major part of production. My partner and I had presented to the class the work that we had been producing throughout the past couple of weeks. We had received a combination of things to improve on as well as aspects that we had done well in. Below is the first draft that we have made:
For every piece of work, feedback is always key in terms of improving it. By asking our class members their thoughts on it, we were able to produce a range of critical feedback on our production.
FEEDBACK #1
- Good Narrative
- Creates Enigma
- Too rough with camera work
RESPONSE: We will make attempts to the camera work by re-shooting the scenes that appear to be a little rough.
FEEDBACK #2
- Logo is suited
- Credits are good
- Continuity
- Main character looking about is quite effective
- Don't use the laptop, use an old computer instead
- Too much of the laptop is shown
- Difficult to establish the theme
RESPONSE: We wanted to have the character to be in a library as a way of making it seem as if his home life is not very good, and it is rare to find a library with "old computers". We will cut down on the laptop scene, as we will be showcasing a few screen recordings of what he is typing. The theme will be more apparent through the editing that we will do; we will make sure that the order of the shots hopefully establishes it better.
FEEDBACK #3
- Camera shots are quite good; you can tell that it's from his perspective
- Title is too big, try downsizing it and maybe not using black and white
RESPONSE: We will try to make the writing a little smaller.
FEEDBACK #4
- Nice font
- Good range of shots
- We see the shot of what he is looking at after he looks away
RESPONSE: We shall edit that eyeline match during editing.
FEEDBACK #5
- Too rough with the camera work
- Credits are quite good
- Some shots are good
- Improve the sound
- More camera angles
RESPONSE: We will make the music much for thrashing and use a few more pieces of camera angles.
FEEDBACK #6
- Good continuity
- Good font
- Effective voice over
- Good location
- Confused as to why there are some credits on the screen and some on the black backgrounds
- Shaky camera work
- He says "what anyone says" twice
RESPONSE: We wanted to highlight the more important people involved as well as separating the shots. We can make the shots less shaky when going back to recording, and we will record the voiceover again with a slightly different script.
FEEDBACK #7
- Good use of shots
- Good angles
- Better sound needed at the beginning
RESPONSE: We will make the sound much more thrashing so it showcases the violence greater.
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